I
was an introvert before I started my six-month internship with the marketing
department of United Overseas Bank. My job scope involved liaising with external vendors and
internal stakeholders to coordinate and execute road shows in public areas. I
had to make plenty of small talk, brainstorm, negotiate and express my ideas
with people I have just met. Frankly speaking, I was sort of forced out of my
comfort zone. I recall an incident where I was tasked to meet up with a hotel
manager to sort out some event details on my own. It was a very challenging
task for me back then, considering the fact that I was very “fresh” and still,
socially awkward. In retrospect, I learnt that one does learn more effectively
when they step out of their comfort zone. I am very thankful to my supervisor
who had given me tons of exposure which challenged me to think critically and
handle things independently. These six
months had changed me for the better as I am more receptive towards
experimenting new things now, which I believe, will contribute positively to my
learning journey in NUS.
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Hey Priscilla! Your reflective writing is well organised:) By the way, I'm happy to know that you have finished such a challenging job, well done. All the best for your NUS journey:)
ReplyDeleteThere is clear structure in your writing and it is well organised. I am really glad that you have learnt a lot from your internship period. Good job!(:
ReplyDeletePriscilla,
ReplyDeleteGood on your for stepping out of your comfort zone to take on challenging tasks.
Content and organisation: You clearly reflected on your learning journey and your change in attitude during your internship. Your ideas are well expressed and flowed logically from the beginning to the end.
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1. Missing article before United...
I started my six-month internship with the marketing department of United Overseas Bank
2. Incorrect use of comma in this section of the sentence: 'and still, socially awkward.' Can you spot the error?
considering the fact that I was very “fresh” and still, socially awkward.
3.Reference to noun....'one does...they'...
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In retrospect, I learnt that one does learn more effectively when they step out of their comfort zone.
4. Incorrect use of comma: in this part of the sentence
'... new things now, which I believe, will...'